Writing Exercise....

Okay, just a little late, but as promised here is a little writing exercise that I'm going to do and I would love it if you all would give it a try in the comments. Might be fun! So here is the deal: Think of a scene (a short one - just a paragraph or less), write it out. Then marinate on it, and write the same thing but in a different way. Marinate some more, then give it a 3rd try. Make sense? Good. Lets give it a shot, and we can all critique each other in the comments. Here's mine:

Attempt 1:
The forest is quiet, the only sound to be heard is that of a young owl testing it's "hoo's" and "ho's". There is a path through the trees, but its not an easy one to make out, obviously it hasn't seen heavy use in sometime. A young boy (age 8) is seen running through a dark forest - he has a look of terror on his face and is running very fast, but from what?

Attempt 2:
A boy, young and fit but wearing the tattered remains of clothes, runs down a path carved through broken broken branches and worn tall grass. Obviously frightened, he runs at a pace that only a child can, looking back at nothing and everything all at the same time.

Attempt 3:
The sound of his own barefeet against the dead grass and broken branches was loud enough to stir the animals. Loud enough to ring in the young boys ears as he ran. Loud enough, unfortunately, for the badman to follow through the otherwise dead silence of the forest.